My Personal Statement: Georgia Institute of Technology - Dennis Z.

06 MAR 2021

In his essay for Georgia Institute of Technology, Dennis recounted his experience with nitrogen narcosis during a 130-foot scuba dive. He describes the journey from feeling fearful of the task at hand, resolving to approach it head-on, the sense of euphoria he felt after emerging and finally his excitement about new challenges coming in his future.

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As I was putting on my mask about to dive in, my instructor reminded me that I would be given a task to complete at 130 feet deep to test the effects of nitrogen narcosis — the potentially deadly alteration in a scuba diver's consciousness which affects their ability to make decisions, creates a false sense of security and brings unpredictable euphoria when diving deeper than 100 feet.

Just before I jumped into the water, I hesitated. What if something went wrong and I could not manage it? But then I remembered why I was doing this: it was not only to become a better diver, but more importantly to challenge myself. With that I jumped in.

Together with my instructor, I slowly began to descend along the guide line. As we neared the bottom of the line, I started to make out the coral reef which sat at around 80 feet. I started to recognise different fish from past dives, everything from vibrant blue fish to bright red lionfish.

As I swam towards the cliff that marked the beginning of uncharted territory, my mind was racing with thoughts of how narcosis could affect me. I was afraid that I would lose my focus and start acting dangerously, but through facing challenges in my life, I have devised a strategy that always levels my thinking: I took a deep breath and re-focused my mind and thought only of the task at hand.

As we passed the cliff, I could see the sandy floor waiting for us at 130 feet, yet it still seemed so far away. I was having a mental war with myself, wondering if I had been affected yet, if I should turn back to the familiar. Eventually, we were only a couple feet from reaching our goal depth and I started to feel excited, but the journey was far from over. As we neared the sea floor, I established my buoyancy and looked at my instructor who was preparing the narcosis test. Much to my surprise, it was an actual test. I took the slate from her, my eyes poured over the long division problem and I began to chuckle through my regulator.

Ordinarily, math is not a humorous subject for me, but the absurdity of the situation was enhanced by the euphoria I was apparently experiencing. With a tap on my shoulder from my instructor, I quickly shook off the effects, focused on the problem and used the waterproof pencil to reach the quotient.

After handing the slate back to my instructor, I looked up and I could barely see the surface - even though the visibility was very clear. It hit me how deep we were: as deep as a twelve story building. I was undeniably affected by narcosis, however I still had a clear head. I nervously watched my instructor as she checked my math. She finished and nodded with a smile. I felt a rush of relief, and finally began to truly notice my surroundings.

First, I recognized that I was slightly shivering and it was darker than usual. Then I noticed the stillness: there were fewer fish and the sea floor seemed untouched, everything seemed more calm. I wanted to stay in this other world for a little longer, but eventually the time came to return to reality.

As we ascended alongside the cliff wall of coral, I was in awe of the incredible beauty of the underwater world which amazed me every single dive. But, before I knew it, we were gazing over the reef again. When we finished our dive and broke the surface, I couldn’t help but smile knowing what I had overcome. This feeling of accomplishment is what keeps me challenging myself every opportunity I can. While we swam to the boat, I immediately felt the urge to plan the next experience that would further challenge me.

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